My Best Friend!

In the past weeks our class (Ako Ngatahi) were writing a short story about a video titled “The Present”. It was a story about a boy who got a present and it was a puppy. After he discovered that the puppy only had three legs.

Here is the video, I assume that you might enjoy the video and maybe my writing too bye!

“The Present”

W.A.L.T: Write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.

My Best Friend

When I woke up I rushed to the kitchen and ate my breakfast which was egg, bacon, oatmeal and pancakes but I burnt it ( I don’t know how to cook). After that I stood up and went to the toilet. I rinsed my face with a bit of cold water and while brushing my teeth I was thinking of video games. What were the games that I can play? Then I accidentally swallowed the water that I shouldn't actually swallow.

I went to the living room, the temperature was hot and it was really sunny, so I closed all the curtains so that sunlight would not ruin my sight. Also I turned on the air conditioner.

All of a sudden I remembered those horror movie forests that are very dark and cold like something will jump out of them and said “ Elghr!” while shaking my head fast. I sat down and played the Battlefield, then suddenly my mum appeared with a little box. She placed the box on the table, opened the curtains and said “ that is your present” while pointing to the box with a bit of smile.

My mum works at an office, and I am pretty sure that her work is supposed to translate mangas.

“Mangas” - they are comics like stories that are normally Japanese but can also be translated in some language, they are mostly black and white, yet sometimes it can be coloured.

“Also, why don’t you go outside?” she questioned. I was very irritated and mumbled  ”Aghr” I was annoyed at first but then I got a bit curious like curious George.

I opened the box and saw a puppy. It was very cute, he was creamy brown in colour and had a big black adorable nose, also he was very energetic, but then I saw it only has three legs. I didn’t like it, then I pushed him off my lap and thought how pathetic. I was very angry and struck the box down, and the puppy didn’t know why. The reason that I didn’t like the puppy is because I thought my friends will mock me ( I don’t mind it now because I love my pet ) and I thought it would be lazy because it only has three legs.

Next he tried to steal my attention so I would play with him, yet I kicked him and he stumbled down. It was like a bowling game and he was the bowling ball. He got up and saw a red ball under the drawers, he ran very fast to get it, then …

(Bang!) I looked and saw him, he hit his head on the drawers, he got up like it was nothing and got the ball anyway. He was happily playing with it, when suddenly he pushed it against my foot, me being annoyed I kicked it and I accidently kicked it to the box that I struck down earlier. Without questioning he tried to get the ball, yet he trapped himself in the box, I was a bit worried and a bit surprised but before I tried to help him he got himself out.

After he got out he was looking for the ball, he was very clumsy I thought , and giggled.

Later on, he saw the ball and he accidently pushed it, towards me, in that time I  became a bit calm and a bit happy, I got the ball and I also crutches, because I’m also disabled.

While getting them that dog was curious then a  soon as I stand up he happily barked. I walked with my dog outside and shouted “mum I’m going outside!”. Of I went with my clumsy new friend.